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Shadowmuse Blown - Shadowmuse Blown - 12-08-2016
I've just posted a small bit of story for the Christmas season on my non-Revege blog:
http://shadowmuse-blown.blogspot.com
It's called "Encounter". There's not much there, yet, just the setting of the stage so far. Will post more tomorrow night.
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Bonecracker - 12-08-2016
Pretty good!! I liked the positivity in it a lot.
There are a few typos... here's one paragraph, I hope you don't mind if I edit it up for you.
[b][u]Original...[/b][/u]
Quote:Inside, a great Christmas tree wth light whites towed nearly two stories high in the cathedral-like lobby. A cozy seating area replete with a roaring fire was to their left, a restaurant to their right and a bar just behind that. Directly ahead was the front desk and the two crossed the nearly empty lobby to check-in with the sole clerk on duty.[b][u][Edited version... [/b][/u]
[i]Inside, a great Christmas tree with white lights towered nearly two stories high in the cathedral-like lobby. A cozy seating area replete with a roaring fire was to their left, a restaurant to their right and a bar just behind that. Directly ahead was the front desk and the two crossed the nearly empty lobby to check-in with the sole clerk on duty. [/i]
Just the first sentence.
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Shadowmuse Blown - 12-08-2016
There will probably be quite a few type-Os. The story is being written directly from my brain to the blog. I didn't even have time to reread it as it was late and I needed to get to sleep for class the next day.
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Bonecracker - 12-08-2016
Keep writing! And if you want a proof-reader to correct typos and grammar, I'm up for it.
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Shadowmuse Blown - 12-09-2016
Part 2 of "Encounter" has now been posted on my non-Revenge blog.
Hope you all enjoy.
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Bonecracker - 12-09-2016
REALLY well written!! Great job.
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Shadowmuse Blown - 12-10-2016
(12-09-2016, 01:52 PM)Bonecracker Wrote: REALLY well written!! Great job.
Thank-you. I wrote some more on my phone after class ended early on Friday, and some more on the plane home. Will hopefully have that posted by Monday night.
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Shadowmuse Blown - 12-12-2016
It's not as much as I'd like to have written for the next part, but I figured I should post part 3 now, as I'm not sure when I'll get to write more of it.
Check out "ENCOUNTER, Part 3" at Shadowmuse-Blown.blogspot.com
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Bonecracker - 12-13-2016
Really impressive and realistic storyline!! Please continue...
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Shadowmuse Blown - 12-17-2016
I posted "ENCOUNTER, Part 4" at Shadowmuse-Blown.blogspot.com for your perusal.
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Bonecracker - 12-17-2016
Good chapter!!
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Shadowmuse Blown - 01-02-2017
Thanks. Hopefully, everyone will like the new chapter I just posted, too.
Part 5 of "Encounter" awaits your review.
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Bonecracker - 01-02-2017
That is seriously GREAT writing, SB!!
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Shadowmuse Blown - 01-07-2017
(01-02-2017, 06:13 PM)Shadowmuse Blown Wrote: Thanks. Hopefully, everyone will like the new chapter I just posted, too.
Part 5 of "Encounter" awaits your review.
(01-02-2017, 07:08 PM)Bonecracker Wrote: That is seriously GREAT writing, SB!!
Thanks, BC
If anyone's interested in reading a preview of my novella, "The Mouse", I've just posted the first chapter of that story at my blog here.
If you enjoy "The Mouse", please be aware that it's available for purchase from me via Paypal for $6.75. Please email for details.
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Bonecracker - 01-07-2017
Fantastic work again, SB! I like the details you go into to really paint a mental image in every scene and how you attend to every detail and nuance. You really bring the reader with you. you could have a real future as a writer, professionally, in fiction. Or science fiction.
It's also surprising at how well you switch from writing from a man's point of view to a woman's. It's almost as if a woman is writing these stories at times,
Please keep up the great work!
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Bonecracker - 01-25-2017
The wait is killing me, Shadow!! Please come back with more to read soon.
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Shadowmuse Blown - 01-28-2017
Thanks for your kind words about "The Mouse", Bonecracker. Much appreciated! Are you talking about the preview I posted or did you buy the whole story?
Today, the wait is over, and I have posted part 6 of ENCOUNTER.
Hope you enjoy it!
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Bonecracker - 01-28-2017
It is a great story! Really well written. One 'have' instead of 'gave' is it for typos I could find. But a brilliant concept too!
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Bonecracker - 02-16-2017
Looking forward to the next chapter, Shadowmuse!
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Shadowmuse Blown - 02-20-2017
Thanks for your kind words, sir.
Editing the next part now. Not sure if I will be able to finish it today, though.
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Bonecracker - 02-20-2017
REALLY looking forward to it!!
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Shadowmuse Blown - 02-22-2017
Okay, it's a short bit, but Part 7 of "ENCOUNTER" has just been posted.
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Bonecracker - 02-23-2017
Great job, and worth the wait! That being said, I can't wait for part 8.
THANK YOU!
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Shadowmuse Blown - 03-19-2017
Okay, then, Part 8 has been posted!
RE: Shadowmuse Blown - Bonecracker - 03-19-2017
HAPPY HAPPY JOY JOY!! (patters off to read)