12-08-2016, 10:24 AM
Pretty good!! I liked the positivity in it a lot.
There are a few typos... here's one paragraph, I hope you don't mind if I edit it up for you.
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[i]Inside, a great Christmas tree with white lights towered nearly two stories high in the cathedral-like lobby. A cozy seating area replete with a roaring fire was to their left, a restaurant to their right and a bar just behind that. Directly ahead was the front desk and the two crossed the nearly empty lobby to check-in with the sole clerk on duty. [/i]
Just the first sentence.
There are a few typos... here's one paragraph, I hope you don't mind if I edit it up for you.
[b][u]Original...[/b][/u]
Quote:Inside, a great Christmas tree wth light whites towed nearly two stories high in the cathedral-like lobby. A cozy seating area replete with a roaring fire was to their left, a restaurant to their right and a bar just behind that. Directly ahead was the front desk and the two crossed the nearly empty lobby to check-in with the sole clerk on duty.[b][u][Edited version... [/b][/u]
[i]Inside, a great Christmas tree with white lights towered nearly two stories high in the cathedral-like lobby. A cozy seating area replete with a roaring fire was to their left, a restaurant to their right and a bar just behind that. Directly ahead was the front desk and the two crossed the nearly empty lobby to check-in with the sole clerk on duty. [/i]
Just the first sentence.
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